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SHARRKAN; ([personal profile] greatest) wrote2020-07-12 07:33 am

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[personal profile] treasuresunclothed 2012-12-28 10:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Soo! I just want to preface this by saying I was so, so excited to be playing with you again! It was really flattering that you guys wanted me to re-app and join the cast again, and I'd been really looking forward to the chance at CR for the first time since the poly days. I really enjoy your portrayal of Sharrkan and he seems just as fun as he is in the canon-- but I do have two main points of crit to bring up.

The first is activity-- threads are hard to poke through and find in network posts, but otherwise I've looked at both your and yamu's tags on the main and logs comms, as well as what's been provided for a/c, and it only further cements my feelings on the matter. I've been back in Z for five months now and I was at first really excited to try plotting and following up with you guys, but I quickly realized it was a bit moot after a solid two months of attempts and nothing ever getting done. Whenever things have come up on plurk after that, I've been a bit hesitant to pipe up and usually don't bother anymore because of it; it gets pretty old to try and work out plotting or get excited talking and joking around about fun things that never happen.

Besides our one log that was dropped in seven comments (and that I personally don't even consider having happened because it went nowhere), I've not seen hide nor hair of either of you. I don't mean to group Britt into this since this isn't crit for her, it's just that everything seems to come as a pair when it comes to Sharr & Yamu. I'd be fine with working out a few assumptions here and there, but our entire CR is assumptions with nothing having ever happened concretely. I'll admit that I dropped the ball when you came back from hiatus this month for December, but that still doesn't explain the four months prior-to. I've looked back on all of the a/c you guys have submitted and it's either with each other or only Judal and Ja'far, with I think two last-day-of-a/c threads with random network posts from Yamu and one log this month with Hakuei, and no one else from you. I haven't seen you participating in any of the events after the handcuff event with Yamu, and you've only been in a couple of logs since joining in July. I'm not holding you up to my activity standards by any means, but it's still falling incredibly short and I'd love to see you around more and branching out. I'd love to play with you! I know there's the LOL DON'T DO YAOIS thing but it doesn't have to be porn-- we always talk about what bros Sin and Sharr would be and how they'd be hitting up bars and brothels together and just being idiots in general, and that'd be a lot of fun and really easy to garner CR in doing so!

This ties in a bit with my second point of crit, being Sharr and Yamu's relationship and how it's been handled. I think you guys really forced it into intimacy right off the bat and threw characterization to the side just to get them banging sooner. In canon they're always fighting and all of the generals are practically family. They've largely grown up together, fought together, ate together-- they're closer than friends on many aspects. They all have a hilarious and wonderful dynamic, with an underflowing dark streak and an unseen rift between the older and newer generals, showing the divide with Sinbad's curse. I don't see them being attracted to each other so easily-- I feel it'd be something more like begrudging worship assistance after exhausting all other possibilities, or having to deal with being thrown together for events that leave little choice in the matter. It'd take a long time to work up to getting along in such a fashion, but you were already at that point after the handcuff event which I think was their first time.

There's so much that could and should be going on, even if it gets handwaved, but it just isn't happening. There's so many possibilities for Sharrkan and Sinbad to get up to mischief and really cause Ja'far and Yamuraiha some grief, going out drinking together or hitting up the hot springs or trying to pick up ladies. I know you're busy and don't have the time for a large amount of RPing, and like I said, that'd be otherwise fine. It just seems like neither of you have any real interest in the game or castmates or really, any other side of gameplay aside from each other. I don't mean to sound harsh, but I'm curious why you two don't just musebox and use game events as prompts if there's no time or interest in the aspects of actually playing in a game.

Sorry this got a little long, and that it's taken me a while to come to you with it. I just wanted to make sure I wasn't overthinking anything or it wasn't a short-term problem if you were busy with finals for one or two months or something. I still have the notepad open of a/c links and who your provided threads have been with if you want to/need to see the patterns, but you're probably already aware of it. Let me know if there's anything you'd like me to expand on or if I can help with anything. :( I really do want to play with you guys, it's just that my idea of fun isn't handwaving and assuming everything. I'm always around on plurk (esp. for pps or @mentions since I get the e-mail notif) or aim if you prefer talking things out one-on-one!
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[personal profile] treasuresunclothed 2012-12-29 01:03 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah it's difficult to really gauge activity without an re:tags system and no activity tracking posts by you guys, so all I have to go on is the comm tags and whatever was submitted for A/C without digging through the network looking for threads, and I'm... so far from being that invested HAHA that's too much work just let me die. I just never see you guys around and it does get worrisome, especially when you're both really important castmates to me and I never get the chance to interact. We never seem to be on the same page with general assumptions either, which I've tried multiple times to work out between everyone.

As for the ship, I think it's handled better on Sharrkan's end than on Yamuraiha's and I am in the process of writing up some crit on that as well-- I don't really need to go into it here, I think, but just to put it down for you that I think it's all right on Sharr's end, just not so much as a whole. I did just want to let you know how I've been interpreting it and how it comes off as from a third person's perspective. ALSO FOR QUICK CLARIFICATION lmfao Sinbad isn't moving out of the apartment, so much as he'll just be staying at the brothel more often than not for security purposes and because it's easier to manage by being there. He'll still be living in the Sindria flat, which is another reason I wanted to try and get everyone on the same page wrt: IC assumptions. He just took the booze he had stashed around to start the bar at the brothel and otherwise that's about it. He has a room at each. I definitely understand not wanting to do the same things over and over again, but at least working out the assumptions would be a big help in knowing what the off hours are like. I try to keep everything clear in what Sinbad's up to but then I'm completely clueless otherwise-- you didn't even state whether Sharr was in synodic or if he was on auto when you hiatused and I assumed the latter until you said he'd been gone when you returned. It's just the little things like that adding up that bother me because by all means it would've been something obvious to know.

I know I don't bother reaching out much anymore, but in the first couple months of re-apping I had been going into everyone's plurks trying to plot things whenever Z/events were brought up. Whenever I'd try to pull it together and get a log start up, no one would reply-- even clearly stating "all right I'll get a log up, when would be convenient/let's work out an ic date" etc. It originally seemed like you were only interested in smutting instead of doing generic things around Z and Britt had expressed interest in DP and such so I tried for that with you guys, but then further thought that you were only interested in Sharr/Yamu and not much else. I gave up, plain and simple. I'm a slow tagger as well more often than not, but I do always backlog and I'm always around OOCly, more than willing to take up the initiative and get things started. Sin's been in 16 logs alone since I rejoined, so it isn't as though I'm scarce haha. When it seemed like no one was really interested I just moved on; I'd had no indication otherwise and I don't want to keep being the only person initiating when there's no expressed interest otherwise.

I did mean the lack of interest more generally, not just in porn. People are all down for handwaving the dirty bits if it's more comfortable for you, but at least he's getting out and about with IC CR in that case and branching out. I do understand, but on the same hand I also think there's plenty more to be done in Z than meets the eye. Yes, the events are pretty 50/50 on aphro and sex flavors of the week, but there's still the interesting backstory plots that pop up as well as finding IC motivations to pursue. For example, Sinbad's antsy being stuck, so he opened the brothel as a way to generate money to build a ship; he wants to sail back to Alderamin or even go elsewhere, even if it probably won't be allowed OOCly. It's a goal he's set and it gives him something to do and work on.

Plenty of people are around for generic plotting and CR, although I'll admit I do understand if it seems boring with all the small talk it takes to lead up into more substantial CR and plots. I HOPE I MADE SENSE OF IT PROPERLY, in any case, but like I said if there's anything I can help with OOCly or ICly, I'd be more than willing to help out. :( I do really want to play with you guys but it's just been disheartening. Without eventing there doesn't leave much room for me to try and jump in, but I'll poke around more often if it's still mutual. [tsun]